Brave New World and pink Barbie dream Actually, I was still trying to blast the SN-FF, when I click This concoction came. Screamed the land here then!
Title: tears of war or tears the war Authors: phoenix_of_light dragon or thunder- &
Haruki_Zorro The maltreated fandom: One Piece, Yu-Gi-Oh, Inu-Yasha
The hare-brained plot: In a previously there unerläuterten future world a very evil dictator, the Mary
; Sue Mayumi using a time machine and Lorenor Zorro, Inu-Yasha and Seto
Kaiba wants to defeat. This is only a flimsy excuse to Zorro
; Sue to the matchmaker.
The anti-quality of the characters: Mayumi is a perfect Mary Sue: bitchy, beautiful and a
gifted fighter, brain-zorro-softener and washed
Inu-Yasha Seto simply unnecessary and bitchy.
spelling, grammar and style: good spelling, but idiosyncratic use of commas.
; ; Time change en masse. //...// Thought form.
excerpt from the story: were abruptly interrupted his thoughts, for out of Rosa
Blue
suddenly (and suddenly Päteritum present) , to be exact:
Sky blue. The next moment he found himself in a bramble
(And imperfect) again (lucky for him that he was not in the mud puddle
Busch had fallen alongside those
(because he would have a few
; ; had mud stains on his jacket, he was only on the spines
scratched and pricked her almost an eye from. As I said, lucky for him.) .
; few seconds but later he was already on solid weider
; background
(brambles are therefore not fixed) saw and quietly to himself
; ; muttering his skeptical new environment. His gaze wandered over
, a small clearing in the middle by tall pines, between which a lot of
; brambles stood. "Where the hell am I here? "
(Na, in
; ; a Badfic! Congratulations! )
Ah yes, reading from health problems at your own risk:)
Prologue: The greatest heroes of the past An inconspicuous house in the middle of a series of settlement . Even after opening the door fell to a maximum
(the unusual shape and time) the accumulation of technical devices in the eye, very unusual for an average family
(Aha. The possession of kitchen appliances, TVs, CD players, hair dryers, etc., so very atypical.). The rooms were more or less chaotic, and you could still see some order
(Long live the paradox of chaos theory!) . The only two beds were made and the large kitchen was meticulously cleaned, although it certainly looked at the frequent cooking. But we turn our gaze into the cellar again
(and on the perspectives and time change) ...
unintelligible murmur was heard
(for the buzz saw the abrupt, arbitrary time change any more than I do) And again it was interrupted by loud curses. It came from a young woman;
(Doppelpunkt!) slim, tall, with short red hair
(TADAAAA! appearance Mary Sue!) . Their everlasting militant expression was from the high cheekbones and an almost cat-like green eyes underlined
(Ta-dah! appearance cliche!) . In her hand she held a remnant of her best friend, a small slip of paper with only 5 words
(The best friend of the good would thus Mary was made of paper (no wonder, what man of flesh and blood has her friend be do)) ?!
"The greatest heroes of the past!"
The murmuring grew louder.
"The greatest heroes of the past, the greatest heroes of the past" Now she almost cried
.
(But only almost, because it was the exclamation point, unfortunately, is assumed.)
"Fuck! What does she mean? Who the hell are the greatest heroes of the past? "
Suddenly she heard a low hum. Stood but actually her best friend Ayaka standing there before her. In flesh and blood? No, it was just a hologram
(and I thought she was out of paper?) , which had been by their words (fuck?) Enabled.
Now it began to speak.
"Hey Mayumi!
(Na-old house, how are you?) I hope that you will never get to see this hologram, because it also means that I'm gone'm here to tell you the following
(dead or missing. But my good mood, I have not lost!) . It's about the last resort. The machine that you see behind me "
The hologram turned slightly and pointed to the machine meant.
"serves to to get help from the three main heroes periods. If this resolves the same hologram, opens the lid of the Holo-Disk, and find a note with detailed instructions.
pass up on. I love you and I know you pack it anyway?
(Oh yes, could you still watering the flowers? Thank you!) "
Now she could no longer hold back the tears. Instead of taking the notes from the now open Holo-Disk, she ran upstairs and threw herself on her turquoise-blue-poster bed.
(Why, after all Badfics poster beds! The way, for the drama and urgency of the mission, the positive Mayumi can indeed be quite nice ...) "Why? Why had this happen?
(What really possible?) Is not fair! "
Again and again she struck on her pillow. Soon she fell asleep exhausted one.
(For a fighter! Sue keeps them out of nothing. If they have the pincushion beating out here, I see black in saving the world.) When she woke up later, it was already dark . She thought fleetingly of her alarm clock, which you immediately announces the time (an invention of her best friend, of course)
(Whether the alarm reacts to nightmares? Great invention.) . At the thought of her she was howling again to mute. But the anger of the people that Ayaka had done this, prevailed. So she got up, showered, and then did what they did best:
She pulled one to her favorite turtleneck sweaters and went down to the kitchen to cook in Cappuccino. Of course, with a mind-controlled coffee
(to press a button because, after all, would waste valuable time.) . Then she ran at last back to the basement, to devote himself fully to the notes
her friend (your friend is indeed very likely to cause death or already dead, but for Beauty and coffee is always time!) .
The note read as follows:
Please bring with:
1 package egg (free range)
2 packages butter
60g salami
3 liters of milk
1 package plain yogurt (far left in the refrigerated section)
(Ah yes, us is the cologne assumed, could you please bring a bottle?)
Mayumi started. Did her friend she kidding? That was one of their Shopping list, which it has always given Ayaka (The other half forgot Good
(such as a bag of seasonal changes for advanced users.) ). Angry
the redhead threw the note on the floor and was about to trudge back to her room when she saw what was written on the back.
Cut: The letter says Mayumi Ayaka that she needs to save the world the help of the three greatest heroes of the past: Seto Kaiba from the young modern (* dunk *), Lorenor Zorro from the pirate era and Inu-Yasha from the Middle Ages.
This was followed by a long construction description, Mayumi executed step by step carefully. Now you also noticed the PS, the scrawled in Ayaka's
(Deppengenitiv!) meticulous handwriting on the bottom edge of the note was
(I scribble in meticulous writing. "Dark it was, the moon was shining bright ..." ) :
"Hurry up, because the two former are in their, in our parallel die time soon.
(I hope you sleep with you not too long to shower, drink coffee and Decoration stopped. Otherwise, stop the world comes under. Half so wild!) Good luck! "
/ / No problem / /, Mayumi thought ironically and finally turned on the machine. Immediately after they had entered the names of the men
(and incorrectly had a comma) , the screens lit up and she could see the three.
Cut: Seto is about to crash his plane, instead, he sinks into a pink-colored swirls. Believe me, Seto, option one would 'have liked you!
Now she turned to the second monitor. Also, there raged a violent storm, except that this time had to fight a ship against wind and weather. Right away she recognized the man who called her friend as Zorro had. She almost forgot everything around him at the sight of his dark eyes
(* dunk * Poor Zorro. ... Large screen btw) . Only when he was pulled from a meter-high waves over the side, grabbed the reality of it again. Just in time she was able once again to press the red button. He, too, was swallowed by a pink swirl. Inevitably they had to grin, for his friends, it must have looked like, as it had pulled down a giant whirlpool
(Sadisten! Sue! But Luffy Zorro would have known better versuet at the bottom of the sea as ...) .
Cut: Even the unsuspecting Inu-Yasha falls victim to Sue. Chapter 1: A hard landing What do you do when you are dragged from one moment to the next in a colorful swirl?
You start panicking and crying hysterically at around?
(Yohoho! And a Bottle of Rum!) It literally screams his throat from the neck?
(throat = neck -> Huh)
Man waving around like a loony with all available to limbs?
(It is pointless paragraphs?
They swapped in a set of questions, strangely, subject and verb?) Yes, "man" perhaps, but certainly not Seto Kaiba. For this indeed is not exactly what one would call a "man"!
(. Why he could never play earlier in the nursery)
No, he did exactly the opposite: he thought. Despite his expressionless face, his eyes were rattled behind the gears
(This is often just not gonna be just yet. See people who think of mostly stupid.) . In extreme Geschwingigkeit his thoughts shot back and forth. Starting with "Hääääää?"
(high intelligent thought .... and unnecessary comma) it went on about "dream?" To "If I catch that this ugly, colorful, pink Strudel ....... Hello? Rosa! Who is the pink already? I hate pink!
(I think this should be a joke. Hm I laugh my head off, you too?) Stop! On the topic of stay-stop! Where was I still go? Oh well, yes. In my plans concerning the murder charge dignity that vile pink Barbie dream.
(Seto knows Barbies? That explains a lot ... Probably he himself had some!) . Have I ever mentioned that I hate pink? Rosa has failed ... "Abruptly
were interrupted his thoughts, for out of Rosa suddenly blue
(and suddenly past tense present tense) to be exact: Sky blue. The next moment he found himself in a bramble
(and imperfect) again (lucky for him that he had not fallen into the mud puddle next to that same bush
(This would have He had a few mud stains on his jacket so he was only the thorns scratched and pricked her almost from one eye. As I said, lucky for him.) ). "
" AU ", he exclaims involuntarily
(" There does not fit you at once, and even get a new time change ü ! mountains fry ") .
A few seconds later he stood on solid ground even weider
(brambles are not so firmly) saw it and was skeptical grumbling quietly to himself, his new environment. His gaze swept over a small clearing in the middle of tall pines, among which were a lot of brambles.
"Where the hell am I here?"
(Well, in a Badfic! Thank Eq ückwunsch!) Then he went further into the forest, but retained all the time its surroundings in mind. He wondered if he would have died if he had stayed on the plane. Suddenly he heard what he himself had been thinking a few minutes.
"I hate pink!"
only slowed down briefly place via a thin branch, landed a very emotional young man acting in the mud puddle next to Kaiba
(Well, now he has mud stains on the jacket.) . He quickly was
(Kaiba?) back on his feet and before Kaiba knew it, he was already three swords to his throat kept
(he has not before the screaming from the neck? Oh no, forgot, I, Seto is indeed not "man".) . This looked at the young swordsman only disinterested, as he even exaggerated the repartee of a response to the three blades on his neck.
"Let me guess Schopf Green: You've swallowed your tongue and are communicating now with these three cheese daggers?
(Extremely clever. And, by the way just stolen. I also wonder what in the devil's name a cheese knife is ...) "
The sarcasm in his voice was of course not to be missed.
between Zorros teeth was itself a "wait!" Hear
(Coaxing the Wado-Ichi-Monji can?) than a third fell into the mud puddle next to the blackberry bush
is (because not already Zorro?) . Is a flash turned the heads of the two in the direction of the newcomer. Also, this young man was not exactly what one described as normal
(Do not worry, your use of commas, it is not because he is in good company.) .
The reaction of the others was unexpectedly equal.
"Since falling from the sky when mutt?" It sounded Inu-Yasha against two voices. Before they knew what hit them found the young men in a fight again, as they rarely saw
(feeling of all time changes, I am also beaten up. By the way, really great idea if it is orientation-and helpless after a involuntary dimension travel, to beat up his first fellow sufferers!) . Kaiba was inevitably drawn into this. Even he could by his years of training beat well, a very satisfying feeling. But he would be non-Seto Kaiba, had him as a pointless fight that it was natural joy.
(Interestingly sentence.) . So he withdrew to a suitable moment back to the small clearing, leaving the fighting cocks himself he saw but still interested and with a tired smile on his lips
(Try rolling interested while tired / disinterested look! multitasking! Seto!) how the two against each other's heads. After more than
an hour (either , the authors have no sense of time, or the guys have a condition u nglaubliche ... ) it was the dog then too much, he drew his sword from his belt and it rammed into the ground
(Moooooment. you want me made to believe that Zorro and Inu-Yasha, the two swordsmen, one hour without beat swords?) . Not only Zorro was torn from the legs, no, went through the whole forest is now a huge swath, starting from the sword of the white-haired.
* Back at Mayumi:
(re the headdesk) "Well, that seems to have worked out ... But where are they now? Shit, Fuck, oh puke but the wall! "
(Sue goes Anti! Sue! Seriously, the lady in urgent need of an anti-aggression program! We should at Pro7's" The View from evil Mä Register girl, "then we would go!) .
began excitedly to her to look in the documents for clues to her friend, where the three young men could be landed
(perhaps a very good idea would have been to make the first.) ... but they found nothing.
with the exclamation:
"Now I have to look for these bags, too!
(which should be here a long time ago and I adore him!) ", attacked her on her jacket. She ran like a madman without having any idea where out of the house.
"Not at all imagine what could do all the types that are almost Palaeolithic! Hopefully they are not just landed in the middle of the city. Afterwards, I must also still free from the asylum. "
(Well, how Sue is worried about the three. After all, she has it torn from their world, but to help them? It is a traumatized Sue, programmed only to worshiped be!) puffing she stopped, without noticing it, she was at the forest reached
(For Sue can often look incredibly well run and think at the same time.) .
/ / Okay ...//, she thought when she saw the sawn wood. / / Inu-Yasha I've ever found
(Inu-Yasha = sawn wood) . Hopefully the others are here somewhere landed nearby. / / From a distance, she heard loud voices. Sitting on the top of a tall tree, she observed the boy. The computer genius led
word
"If I catch, me with these two idiots in this Forest has sent shit (pink, I hate pink!) talk
(Muhaha! Try to time in brackets, "... has clip on pink, I hate pink! parenthesis then ..." repeated addition Seto is the good bit.) then he will get the radishes to see from below. "
(* snort snort * That sounds kind of cute rather than as a death threat ...) Mayumi swallowed, even the sweet e
Zorro (snort snort * ² * So sweet is pretty much the very last adjective with which I would describe Zorro ...) seemed Kaibas opinion quite apart from the dog
(Inu-Yasha is consistently ignored anyway. So on with the text * shrugs *) . It was immediately clear that they do not say the three, the truth was. Best ever. / / If I really want to have help
(should I be less nice and simple sueig ) may, I I can not tell really. And most importantly, you have to find me and not vice versa!
(sense?) So, to your daily battle exercises! I have to be just loud enough to notice me / /
Cut. Sues brilliant work plan and Zorro is going on, the cause of the riots to . Search As Zorro came to the next clearing, the noise had stopped suddenly. moved at once in the tree beside him a branch and Hepp, a red-haired girl landed elegantly in front of him. He was so shocked that the only thing he could say a gegrummeltes: "Get out of my way, girl!"
(The typical reaction surprise ... Even though he is not the greatest speakers, as measured by the fact that she is the only other man in the woods would be a "Who are you and where are we here?" quite there.) was.
But it was too cheeky, "Why do you men can never manage to tell a girl that you find them great? You will then always the same so ... ähmm ... childish? "
(Is not she just gorgeous, this Sue? So naturally, witty, enchanting, charming and very breichreizerregend?) "You want it so be really going after," he growled, and pulled out in no time his three swords.
(fine recognized. Only a dead Sue Sue is a good. Unless it is a Special Powers! Resurrection! Sue.) If she was surprised by this, we noticed it in any event will not start.
A quick fight sparked up where it was clearly inferior. Thanks to their good technique but it managed to hold their own against the green-haired
(which stood in stark contrast to the first set) , but she found herself that she could not win. She was also impressed by her adversaries still and looked deep into his eyes rather than to concentrate on fighting
(because she was a Sue, of course, they could still fight fabulous.) . But he too had a similar
(The Effect Sue) , and so It was no wonder that he, as their last effort together was, as intended by it
(Psychokid! Sue!) , tripped over a thick tree root.
(Welch & Welch ingenious plan realistic scenario.) sword thrust through her (she wanted him, of course, not seriously injured) is in his stomach
(Which body part is better than to someone you do not will seriously injure pin down, when the stomach?) he won momentum, and he succeeded in falling anyway, they strongly wound to the arm. Panting schang the redhead in the trees, called him one last "Great fight, Zorro!" and was gone.
(Opens up to you the meaning of this action, except to specify that Sue wanted?)
Cut: Zorro staggers back with open abdominal wall to the other, Inu-Yasha doctored him. Kaiba the other hand, tried to ignite a fire at dusk to what he was after a short time
(Muhaha, Seto of Survival! Campers!) . He turned to the wounded swordsman, who was now awake again.
(And now, Ladies and Gentlemen, one of the most substantial talks since GZSZ!)
"What's your name at all, and who the hell are you so tanned?
" Even if it concerns you not, my name is Zorro!
(Bitchy! Zorro!) And you? "
" go up but also to anything, but I'm Seto Kaiba!
(Bitchy! Seto!) Besides, you have not answered my second question. "
" I will not, although it was quite strange
(I also deny before everything before I give answers . In the same sentence.) ...... how she knew my name? "
Even the white-haired Dog was now back.
(names are just words.)
"WHAT? DO you just said? You can beat up but not by so 'precious girl? ", It was amusing.
But for sheer exhaustion Zorro was asleep.
QUICK Inu-Yasha and his wound was leaning slightly away from the other to a tree
(for he had recognized that Zorro was versuet and would not get infected. Clever boy.) .
Cut: Inu-Yasha and Miroku Kagomé mourning after.
Well, I mourn for my brain cells. TT you soon, Kaa.
